Hindi Gazal
(If you wish to sing sing it like Kumar Vishwas' "Koi Deewana kehta hai" or Mohd Rafi's "Khilona jaan kar ..." :):))
गली के मोड़ पे बैठा वो भूखा गुनगुनाता है,
पके जो चाँद की रोटी, लगे मीठी बताता है,
टहलने आज निकला है, पुरानी याद का मौसम,
वो गाओं से भरे बादल, शहरो पे बहाता है,
नही है मौत की परवाह, नही है जन्म पे रुकता,
फकिरो सा समय जोगी सदा बढ़ता ही जाता है,
यहाँ पे वक़्त किसको है, यहाँ सब दौड़ना चाहे,
कभी माँ-बाप का रोना, कभी बच्चा सताता है,
कहीं गोरे कहीं हिंदू कहीं हिन्दी के मेलो में,
जो छूटा एक बच्चा, नाम वो भारत बताता है,
हवा में धुन्द है, लंबा सफ़र अँधा कटे कैसे,
रूको तो राह की चिंता, चलो तो चैन आता है,
बड़े कितने बनो तुम शाह रहोगे बस खिलौने से,
वो जितना खेलना चाहे हमें उतना खिलाता है
1222 1222 1222 1222
Gujarati Gazal
જીતવુ નો'તૂ ના હારવું હતું
ફક્ત આ સ્વપ્ન કંડારવુ હતું,
હાથતાળી દઈ, આપ તો ગયા,
જે વધેલુ જીવન કારમું હતું,
તુંય તો ખ્વાબ આ દેખતી હશે,
સાવ અણધારયુ ધારવુ હતું,
બાન્ધયુ'તૂ જે અમે ડાળખાં મૂકી,
ઍક ઍ માળખુ બાળવું હતું,
સગપણો જો ઘણાં પૂર માં વહે,
બસ હવે ડૂબતું તારવું હતું
212 212 212 12
P.S. : Have been learning to write behr/chhand based Gujarati and Hindi Poetry for a while. Understood after quite some time that there is some very basic difference between the two and needs to be treated differently. Hindi Poetry relies directly on the sound of a word and also gives quite some freedom to the one who is delivering / reading the poetry to pronounce. Whereas Gujarati poetry is slightly inflexible in that sense. The unit it uses unlike Hindi Poetry is not "Phoenetic sound" but it is the letter! Which means that "hrsva" or "Dirgha" of the letter is one that decides the weight. Moreover I saw little liberty in taking words like "til" "bil" "fir" as one letter of double weight, it is seldom considered to be 2, but is always 21.
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